I'm going to be a little harsh, but you've got good ideas, and it would be great to see this done better.
You've got a hell of a lot of run-on sentences, mispellings, and generally poor grammar. You need a better beta, but more than that, you need to work on your English grammar so the beta doesn't have to catch all of these things.
You might also consider that this is a Viggo/Sean community, and Viggo/Orli doesn't belong here.
Too bad the author had such a snit over it. Would have been happy to point her in the direction of some VigOrli coms that are always looking for new work. *shrugs*
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Date: 2004-04-13 04:17 pm (UTC)You've got a hell of a lot of run-on sentences, mispellings, and generally poor grammar. You need a better beta, but more than that, you need to work on your English grammar so the beta doesn't have to catch all of these things.
You might also consider that this is a Viggo/Sean community, and Viggo/Orli doesn't belong here.
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Date: 2004-04-13 06:02 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2004-04-13 07:27 pm (UTC)It was Viggorli, which doesn't belong in rugbytackle, but it was a decent fic. Just needed some tune ups.
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Date: 2004-04-13 09:54 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2004-04-14 06:42 am (UTC)no subject
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