Drabble: Untitled (Any suggestions?), Viggobean, PG or PG-13

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

Author: fantasy_land
Pairing: Viggobean
Rating: Can't decide if it should be PG or PG-13
Disclaimer: Not true, any of it. Don't know the guys, am implying nothing about their actual lives.
Feedback: Yes, please. All constructive criticism is greatly appreciated, as are all comments.


All he'd wanted was a fuck-buddy, a good friend for casual sex. No complications, no strings attached. Hell, they both wanted that at the beginning. So why are the silences between them uncomfortable now? Why are the jokes now unfunny? Why does Viggo look at him with accusation in his intense eyes?
Sean gathers up his courage (Since when did it take courage to talk to his best mate?) and walks over to Viggo's table. Sits down, takes a deep breath.
"What's going on, mate? What's wrong?" Viggo looks at him with sadness and suddenly, realization dawns. Viggo's in love.

Comments

[drachekatze.livejournal.com]

*sniffles and cuddles Viggo* Very sad, very poignant. Lovely.

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

awww...*cuddles both of you* Thanks for the feedback. I'm glad you liked it, sadness and all. =)

[thalassatx.livejournal.com]

Awww... And if Sean didn't love Vig, he wouldn't care. I wuv them both.

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

I agree. Sean just doesn't know he loves Viggo yet. He needs to figure it out soon, I think. I'm glad you liked the drabble!

[rinsbane.livejournal.com]

ohh, the poor things. Both of them! Nicely done--you really conveyed the emotion here of both. Even nicer b/c Viggo's feelings were very clear despite it being Sean's POV :)

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it...I wasn't sure if Viggo's feelings came across well (the whole show, not tell thing), so it's nice to hear that they did. And now my Sean and Viggo muses are angsty and demanding something fluffy and happy. Heh.

[nessa-t.livejournal.com]

this is frighteningly good. Why frightening? coz with just a few words, i think you are able to explain the emotions very well... fantastic. whew...

About the title... hmmm.. i'm not too good at them meself *grin* 'ow about "unspoken words"? lol... i know i know... bad.. *grin*

Nessa

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

Wow. Thank you. I'm very flattered by the comment. So much so that I'm not sure how to respond. I'm just really glad the drabble worked.

Yeah, titles aren't my strong point. I haven't come up with anything that really fits...some discarded ideas have been such wonderful things as "love" or "silence" So yeah...yours wins over those any day. =)

[milochka.livejournal.com]

Mmm, a lovely drabble. It really captures their relationship's evolution in just a very few words. Good job!

[fantasy-land.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I used to read drabbles thinking they weren't too hard to write, but now I realize that it takes a lot of precision to say waht I mean in exactly 100 words. I'm glad you liked it!