Drabble: A/B (PG)

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Drabble: A/B (PG)
Title: Be still…
Author: alex_quine
Pairing: Aragorn/Boromir
Rating: PG
Warning: Character death
Summary: Boromir will not yield
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“Still, man! For pity’s sake, hold still…

Eru, that last barb cut deep… no escape this time, Boromir…they flow around you, foul things passing…be still and they may not finish you…take shallow breaths, man… be still and the shaft seals the wound…live to tell the little ones’ fate…but one does not pass…lift your head, Boromir…ah, the dark bowman…no orc this…it sees the fear in me…Eru, it understands honour…and I have none…oh love, I failed you…oh lover mine, I failed our people…so archer, you notch another shaft and smile…at the last, let Gondor look ruin in your eye…I do not yield.”

Comments

[lab-jazz.livejournal.com]

This is so powerful...so sad. It brought back to me the terrible sequence in the movie. Poor, poor Boromir

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

I watched the scene a number of times and became caught up in the eye contact between Boromir and the archer. Glad it worked for you.

[mooms.livejournal.com]

Sad and powerful indeed ! I watched this again last week and your drabble evokes this scene so heartbreakingly well !

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Thanks for your comments. The scene makes me cry every time I see it - damn, they're good - and I wanted to work on Boromir's inner monologue.

[afra_schatz]

Very powerful.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Your comments are much appreciated. I wrestled with another version, which started as Boromir became aware of the archer and contained more aggression - basically one long curse - but I was caught by the camera shot where he kneels panting as the Uruk-hai pass on either side of him and I felt he still had enough purpose, to come out in the later exchange with Aragorn, that he'd be the professional soldier, still calculating, planning what he had left to do.

[me-cuppa.livejournal.com]

Very intense and true to the movie.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Many thanks for commenting. My Dad read the Hobbit and then the Rings to me when I was nine, one chapter every night, but I've fallen heavily for Jackson's reading of them...tremendous story-telling.

[govi20.livejournal.com]

Sad...as sad as in the movie. Beautifully written!

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Thankyou for commenting...very kind. It is a fine film sequence. I am moved as I watch it and though it's only short, writing this piece was draining, trying to conjure up the emotions behind the actions.

[ribby.livejournal.com]

*shivers* Oh, this is wonderful... so very Boromir, and so very heartbreaking. His voice is spot-on here, as is his recognition of what Aragorn means to him, and the way you've written this is just perfect. I can hear the mental "catches of breath" with every ellipsis, fading as he fades. Lovely!

~Kris

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Many thanks for your kind comments. The rhythm of the speech was important to me and I'm glad it worked for you too.