Drabble: One Last Service A/B (PG)

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Drabble: One Last Service

Author:alex_quine

Pairing: Aragorn/Boromir

Rating: (PG)

Summary: Aragorn will care for him.

Archive: Rugbytackling, my LJ

Disclaimer: These characters belong to their copyright holders. I borrow them for entertainment, not profit.

Feedback: Received with thanks.

 

Aragorn would not let him go down to the sea with the arrows still in him.

 

They’d broken the shafts off roughly. Then Aragorn had carried him down the hillside, cradled in his arms, going slowly on the slippery leaf mould underfoot. And he talked to Boromir all the way, did not care that the Elf and the Dwarf heard him.

 

As Legolas prepared the boat, Gimli built up the fire for hot water to cleanse him. Aragorn began one last time to undress his love and as his fingers touched Boromir’s skin, he realised that Boromir was still warm.

 

Comments

[brigantine.livejournal.com]

Oh, sure. Just kill me, whydontcha? Part of me wants to read that last line as a sign that Boromir lives, but the other part just sees it adding to the sniffle factor.

Love the image of Aragorn talking to Boromir as he's carrying him!

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

I began by seeing a scene that needed filling in - preparing Boromir for his funeral boat - and part of me wanted to take another 100 words and have Aragorn hold him, possibly to his naked breast and will Boromir to live, even as he cooled in his arms - but - we've all had a bit of a rough day, so I stopped it here.

And then as I got ready to post it, it occurred to me that it could just as well be the start to a 'Cold Pressing' prequel - I can make him live if I want to. *girds loins determinedly* Thanks for feeding back.

[shalom]

Between you and ladymarshy, I've had to stock up on tissues! Lovely, haunting moments you captured.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Thankyou so much for feeding back so kindly. It's always the small moments that tend to get to me.

[shalom]

If you want a longer sob, try this (used up a box of tissues beta-ing it):
http://ladymarshy.livejournal.com/1999.html#cutid1

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

I found this one a while back. It's a beaut.

[helena-s-renn.livejournal.com]

ah, that last sentence just got to me: Aragorn began one last time to undress his love and as his fingers touched Boromir’s skin, he realised that Boromir was still warm. i hope there really is hope.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Many thanks for reading and for your kind feedback. I wanted that last sentence to be capable of reading for both hope and despair. I'm inclining towards the hope myself.

[ribby.livejournal.com]

MAUUGGH! *sobs wildly*

Oh, that's heartrending... I have hope that Boromir's still alive, but how *can* he be.... please tell me there's more, or at least a resolution?

Even so, oh my this is elegant... spare and gorgeously phrased. *sniffles*

~Kris

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Glad it worked for you - in a heartrending sort of way - and many thanks for feeding back so kindly.

As I've said above, I think a positive outcome is called for...

[runriggers.livejournal.com]

Nice. Is this the start of something else or is that going to be it? Should I hope for Boromir to survive?

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Many thanks for reading and feeding back. Glad it's working for you. It could be a start of something larger, but at the least I'll put some sort of resolution to it soon.

[redminerva17.livejournal.com]

Such emotion in so few words....

How... odd that you would choose this scene at this moment. I had just been thinking that someone should write about what transpired between the farewell kiss and the launching of the boat.

Perhaps now it will not come to that. This time there is hope....

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Great minds clearly think alike. Glad you like it and thanks for feeding back. Hope to carry it forward soon.

[przed.livejournal.com]

I think you've ripped my heart out, but in such a beautiful way that I can't complain.

It's the small details that make this so gutting. Gimli preparing hot water; Aragorn taking care not to slip on the leaves as he carries Boromir.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

This has the potential to be the most poignant of scenes...a last goodbye, a chance to hold a loved one for the last time... Thankyou for reading and feeding back. It's much appreciated.

[govi20.livejournal.com]

This is so heartbreakingly beautiful!

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Glad it worked for you. Many thanks for reading and for the feedback.

[archet.livejournal.com]

On the first read I found this beautiful and tragic, filled with a deep depth of emotion, Aragorn's heartbreak apparent as he carries Boromir, still talking to him. On the second read I still find all those things, though reading the ending with that little flicker of potential hope was really lovely. However it turns out, a great drabble! ;)

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Really glad you liked it. I admit that I wrote it first thinking in terms of a tragic ending, but I rather like the idea of a flicker of hope too.

[mooms.livejournal.com]

Oh, this is beautiful ! The first time I read it, I found it heartbreakingly sad, and the little details were wonderful. Then I read it again and felt the flicker of hope at the end. I would love it if you were able to write more !

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

Will certainly try. So glad that it spoke to you and thanks for the kind feedback.

[rotpunkt.livejournal.com]

Oh god. Boromir has heard him all the time, I'm sure. Makes me cry.

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

They do say that people in comas can hear what is being said to them - and if he is dead, then I'm sure his spirit walks with Aragorn and hears him still.