Drabble

Jun. 9th, 2003 02:21 pm
yueni: fantasy bosom (are you brave enough? - yueni)
[personal profile] yueni posting in [community profile] rugbytackle
Title: Untitled as yet. (Title suggestions are ever welcome)
Pairing: VM/SB
Classification: RPS
Rating: R-ish/NC-17-ish
Disclaimer: Don't know them. Don't plan on knowing them. Don't know their sexual orientation. Don't know if this really happened. Probably NOT. It's fiction. FICTION. Also known as LIES. Yes. I'm a liar.
Author's notes: Huge thank yous to [livejournal.com profile] janeausten and [livejournal.com profile] lynneybean for the beta. Also, thanks to [livejournal.com profile] milochka for pointing me to this community.

If you guys could read and give me constructive criticism, that would be muchly appreciated.



The heaving breaths were a rhythmic counterpoint to the harsh slapping of flesh against flesh that echoed in the small room. All around them, leering orc faces sneered in a macabre display of glee. Viggo ignored his rubber audience, intent only upon Sean, who was bent over an old work table, his ass angled perfectly for pleasure and for pain.

Thrusting in and out, in and out, the universe ceased to exist for a single moment when everything melded into a singular harmony that hovered, poised in a delicate, unearthly counterpoint to the coarse, harsh reality of the work room.

Date: 2003-06-09 02:32 pm (UTC)
ext_14641: (hello!Bean)
From: [identity profile] cinzia.livejournal.com
Er... constructive criticism? You just made my head implode! :)
It's lovely. And hot. And WETA! Sorry, but it really seems I'm reduced to incoherence... it's a brilliant drabble!
Do you have more of this, by any chance? :)

Date: 2003-06-09 03:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenmstar.livejournal.com
*melts to a puddle* When I find my brain I'll work on that constructive criticism thing...

Date: 2003-06-09 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] milochka.livejournal.com
I've already told you what I think of this, but I'll sum it up again: yummy!

Very pleased that you joined us... we're always glad to lure others into the lair of VigBean love. :-)

Date: 2003-06-10 09:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] atanvarne-lj.livejournal.com
Very pleased that you joined us... we're always glad to lure others into the lair of VigBean love. :-)

And they are very good at it. Loved Viggo ignoring the rubber audience. That was good for a grin. Thanks!

Date: 2003-06-09 07:26 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] karelian
Guuuuuhhhhhhhh! More! (That can be the title!)

Date: 2003-06-09 08:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] archet.livejournal.com
Title? This doesn't need a title, it speaks for itself. *g* Excuse me while I go read again...and again...and again...

Great job!

Date: 2003-06-11 03:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hithluin.livejournal.com
EEEE!!! Weta-smut!!!

*giggles*

Lovely descriptions and welcome to the VigBean homeworld ;)

Date: 2003-06-23 12:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jennandanica.livejournal.com
late in commenting - was away on holidays & just now catching up.

this is absolutely wonderful. and you've managed to make people (including me) *bibble* having conveyed a scene of extreme hotness in exactly 100 words.

congratulations. well done. and welcome to [livejournal.com profile] rugbytackle

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